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[kast1]

PROPS OF DISCONNECTION

Nurudeen's piece

Pleasant evening on a walk to the theatre
I see a fire fly dancing in the night
who knows why they light up?
why they dance?
But I know why the Dance troupe I'm going to see
will do their thing
It's an awareness campaign against abortion
My fiancee would be on stage
she just removed Our last one
and in ten minutes the act is done
the rigours of monthly practice and workout
gone, with the swinging hips, nimble feet,
bulging muscles, strecthed skin, as limbs with precision are flung about
perspiration, now dry as the dead drum beat......
...Fades,......and backstage it's time for Puff Puff Pass
I'll get drunk tonight and with a hangover probably miss class
But I'm the teacher though
Yeah! those kids, what more do I teach them?
I'm done for the term with weeks to go.
sometimes it's good not to give a f*ck
just roll the blunt, smoke, float, get detached
and view this world as from lofty heavens through a looking glass.
Yeah!~








Kast's piece

I manufacture far too many ideas for them all to be stored between my ears.

So when my mind is filled to capacity,
I let my thoughts seep through a "pen"
and pour
onto
a thirsty "page" that swallows my words whole
-A "page" that is easily manipulated by its author.
Its paper-thin soul, believes everything that is spoon-fed to it.

The "pen" is no different from its enemy
-It does exactly what its told.
The wielder has full control.
It will keep spilling ink until its soul runs cold...

Pen and page connect only to kill each other.

Its a sad truth that they are just tools
- used and abused...
Eternal rivals made to fight
everytime someone picks up a pen and pad to write, scribble or draw...
either way, they end up in the middle of war
while the aurthor sits safely behind closed doors and
watches
how the
ink
pours....

This goes out to all the pens, pencils and sheets of paper...
that have fought, shed tears of ink, and died for the sake of these words...

[AddictiveSoul]

Alrightie...

I'm leaving this thread open for 3 days...

Voters, please read the rules first...

bless

[nii]

well i was feeling kast more on this one...

kast message was a bit clearer..how people mislead others with their opinions which at this point is a written one and the pen and paper being the weapons here..at the end of the day, the message went well for me..even though he cld still work on his structure..otherwise ma vote goes for Kast..

Nurudeen on the other side had a creative idea but i guess he/she cldnt get the message across well..moreover, think i saw some fillers there..some sentences were only meant to take some space in the piece but great concept anyways..the only part tht got me was where his gurl had already aborted their unborn child but ironically finds herself in a dance troupe perfoming at a show against abortion..nice concept but like always,there's more room for improvement..props tho..


VOTE=KAST 1

lets' the vote coming..am here to stay..


peace..

[Sike The God]

Vote Kast.

[AddictiveSoul]

^^ Is that an outburst, or a vote?...

[kast1]

only 2 people have responded to this, :?

whats going on?

[Ghostic]

Nuru's Piece was cool,kinda simple....
But Kast killed this PB(Poetry Battle)...Dyeem look at those opening bars....Gaddyeem!

kast1 said:

Kast's piece

I manufacture far too many ideas for them all to be stored between my ears.

So when my mind is filled to capacity,
I let my thoughts seep through a "pen"
and pour
onto
a thirsty "page" that swallows my words whole
-A "page" that is easily manipulated by its author.
Its paper-thin soul, believes everything that is spoon-fed to it.

VOTE===Kast.

[Loafsta boy]

Yo that shit was the bomb Kast1

[AddictiveSoul]

[i]okey dokey...

Kast1 - 4
Nurudeen - 0

Must say, i'm pretty disappointed with the (lack of) response this battle got.
So should we end this at that, or keep it open for a little while longer?[/i]

[kast1]

i doubt things will get anymore exciting in here, lol, thanks to those that commented on these pieces

peace

[Sike The God]

kast1 said:

i doubt things will get anymore exciting in here, lol,

http://www.universal...board/index.php

[kast1]

hahahahaha

[nevilbee]

was out for a couple days. is it too late to "kast" a vote? :D
i think nurudeen was talking about alcohol abuse, if i'm not mistaken

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and view this world as from lofty heavens through a looking glass.
Yeah!~

but like nii said, kast had a clearer message in his piece.

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So when my mind is filled to capacity,
I let my thoughts seep through a "pen"
and pour

that line just killed me. i must say i enjoyed both pieces but my vote:

VOTE=kast1

[Nu'Rudeen]

for the sake of those who dont know yet Nurudeen=Sid Green, so Nii i'm mosDEF a HE!

now to the battles i cant say i was suprised, i mean Kast!? c'mon dude is tight as ufck and i have no excuse with what i wrote the idea came out just like i wanted but peeps just dont seem to see what i saw when i was writing it

i just hope we have more battles here this thing has to take a little time to click but then we should al show more intrest in it at least.......

Peace to the fam, those who voted and our Mod for the battle.
Big ups to Kast, a ufcking tight poet-cum-rapper [or should the be the other way around? rapper before poet? :? ]

[kast1]

haha, poet before mc, lol,

yeah man, i really enjoyed this battle, although i thought there would be alot more hype, :( was still dope as hell trying to prepare a verse, had to come up with something above par if i wanted 2 go against you, thats how we elevate, meet our match and battle our masters!!!

mad props 2 you nurudeen, you always make it enjoyable, just shout when you down for another battle :D

peace fam

[unheard voice]

I know I'm a little late but I haven't really been online lately.
I've been real busy at work but I vote for nurudeen
because I liked the way his poem was structured. By reading
the begining you would think that he was going to talk
about abortion but in the end he really talks about alcohol abuse
and not giving a f**k which you really never see so
that makes me like it better. So my vote goes to Nurudeen.

[Realist]

I know I may be a lil late on this one but dame Kast piece was ill. Real ill. Holla

[PassionatePisces]

i know i'm beyond late but i jus gotta give props where they are due, and KAST you KILLED this piece!

[eizzy.k]

like its already been said, Kast's peice had better content and was expressed with killa poetic style, and nurudeen did have some fillers, but my vote goes to Nurudeen, b'cuz of these lines...

...Fades,......and backstage it's time for Puff Puff Pass
I'll get drunk tonight and with a hangover probably miss class
But I'm the teacher though
Yeah! those kids, what more do I teach them?
I'm done for the term with weeks to go.
sometimes it's good not to give a f*ck
just roll the blunt, smoke, float, get detached
and view this world as from lofty heavens through a looking glass.
Yeah!~

Yeah, i been there too!!
lol
i vote Nurudeen