moi1 said:
i wrote myself out of the womb with a poison pen that broke my mother's water, grounding my feet like roots.
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Posted 23 September 2008 - 05:43 AM
Thats deep man, can't wait to read more from u', welcome to tha' forum, stay active.
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Fuck wit' me n' I'ma break u' skull, expose u' brains to reality/
jus' to make u' think outside that box u' call a head/
* I don't only think ahead, but ma' thoughts surpass those of a single head * |Couzifer|
jus' to make u' think outside that box u' call a head/
* I don't only think ahead, but ma' thoughts surpass those of a single head * |Couzifer|
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Posted 22 October 2008 - 10:02 AM
Hi
I am new at this and need some help regarding the technical side of writting poetry.I have written poems and I am proud of them but not ready to share with anyone as yet.I need some assistance with three things.I need to know how to count the lines in a poem as well as how to count letters and syllabels.I dont know how to go about this cos i dont even know what a syllables looks like or what it's function is.
If anyone can give me some advice i would really appreciate it.
thankyou very much.
anwar davids :)
I am new at this and need some help regarding the technical side of writting poetry.I have written poems and I am proud of them but not ready to share with anyone as yet.I need some assistance with three things.I need to know how to count the lines in a poem as well as how to count letters and syllabels.I dont know how to go about this cos i dont even know what a syllables looks like or what it's function is.
If anyone can give me some advice i would really appreciate it.
thankyou very much.
anwar davids :)
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Posted 24 October 2008 - 09:26 AM
Welcome to AHH. I hope you'll be able to share your poetry with us soon. you'll see that this is a 'safe place', a 'poetic home', if we critize, it's uplifting and motivating, it's to help you grow as a poet. now to answer your question (anybody feel free to correct me if i'm wrong), the answer is pretty simple.
the number of lines is ...like it says...how many seperated lines a poem counts
roses are red - line 1
violets are blue - line 2
I translate my soul into poetry - line 3
and so should you - line 4
so this poem has 4 lines, another one (I took slightlypoetic's poem)
Who am i? - line 1
I am but a woman who has lost her way in life but is finding herself through words - line 2
who am i? - line 3
I am the only star in the sky brightening up ur lives with syllables of salvation and sacrifice - line 4
who am i? - line 5
In essence im a lil like you alot like me but nothing like them - line 6
who am i? - line 7
just a ghost on a board with seekers searching for an identity. - line 8
THATS WHO I BE. - line 9
counting letters, I guess you should take that literally, literally count how many letters are used. for example our "one line seven words" thread, that topic title has 17 letters.
Syllabels: Definition
A syllable is a unit of sound composed of:
- a central peak of sonority (usually a vowel), and
- the consonants that cluster around this central peak.
so the word 'syllabel' has 3 syllabels: sy - lla - bel
your name anwar davis has 4: an - war da- vis
my nick has 5: po-e-tic se-raph
the poetry thread on the african hip hop forum ->
the po-e-try thread on the a-fri-can hip hop fo-rum: this phrase has 14 syllabels
well i hope this helps you out
kinda like where u cut the word - in speech - to change the sound.
the number of lines is ...like it says...how many seperated lines a poem counts
roses are red - line 1
violets are blue - line 2
I translate my soul into poetry - line 3
and so should you - line 4
so this poem has 4 lines, another one (I took slightlypoetic's poem)
Who am i? - line 1
I am but a woman who has lost her way in life but is finding herself through words - line 2
who am i? - line 3
I am the only star in the sky brightening up ur lives with syllables of salvation and sacrifice - line 4
who am i? - line 5
In essence im a lil like you alot like me but nothing like them - line 6
who am i? - line 7
just a ghost on a board with seekers searching for an identity. - line 8
THATS WHO I BE. - line 9
counting letters, I guess you should take that literally, literally count how many letters are used. for example our "one line seven words" thread, that topic title has 17 letters.
Syllabels: Definition
A syllable is a unit of sound composed of:
- a central peak of sonority (usually a vowel), and
- the consonants that cluster around this central peak.
so the word 'syllabel' has 3 syllabels: sy - lla - bel
your name anwar davis has 4: an - war da- vis
my nick has 5: po-e-tic se-raph
the poetry thread on the african hip hop forum ->
the po-e-try thread on the a-fri-can hip hop fo-rum: this phrase has 14 syllabels
well i hope this helps you out
kinda like where u cut the word - in speech - to change the sound.
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Posted 24 October 2008 - 02:33 PM
whats good its your boy Daplaymaker and I want to say thank you to everyone who has commented positive or negative about my poetry/storytelling. Growth is what we need as poets and I am thankful that Almighty God himself has kept me alive this long to reach other people through my writing.
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Posted 29 October 2008 - 08:08 PM
I am the offspring of reason,
treasons derranged,
seasons engagded in the struggles of
anti policy, poverty and political heresey,
seeing there control through the prison industry
its complex, im so complex it tempts me
im fearless cant you see this, my mind makes my pen drop realness,
im relentless and ancy,
so i preach the voices of my ancestry,
the ones of my people, im every flag word wide and there geneology,
there breath of existance, the seed of resistance and there movements,
my grandparents knew this im planted and deep rooted
to the essence of pedro camps, filiberto rios and
all the unamed brothers and sisters on the same plain
weather white, black or brown, on the flight to indipendance,
way beyond taxcuts and welrare its warfare,
i contribute patterns of brain connections that inspire rebellion
and rejection,
let them make the pass its time for our interception,
were known by the unknown,
most of us are fully grown and understand my concept,
its my public outcry,
hear my voice,
feel my pain and
see my vision,
speaking with precision,
its my incision with a sharp blade, extractions of treaties made
for capital interests of the blood sweat and tears of my peers,
open ya eyes, ears and clench ya fist,
listen to my words embrace my direction
and lets alter the imperial with political inperfections.
treasons derranged,
seasons engagded in the struggles of
anti policy, poverty and political heresey,
seeing there control through the prison industry
its complex, im so complex it tempts me
im fearless cant you see this, my mind makes my pen drop realness,
im relentless and ancy,
so i preach the voices of my ancestry,
the ones of my people, im every flag word wide and there geneology,
there breath of existance, the seed of resistance and there movements,
my grandparents knew this im planted and deep rooted
to the essence of pedro camps, filiberto rios and
all the unamed brothers and sisters on the same plain
weather white, black or brown, on the flight to indipendance,
way beyond taxcuts and welrare its warfare,
i contribute patterns of brain connections that inspire rebellion
and rejection,
let them make the pass its time for our interception,
were known by the unknown,
most of us are fully grown and understand my concept,
its my public outcry,
hear my voice,
feel my pain and
see my vision,
speaking with precision,
its my incision with a sharp blade, extractions of treaties made
for capital interests of the blood sweat and tears of my peers,
open ya eyes, ears and clench ya fist,
listen to my words embrace my direction
and lets alter the imperial with political inperfections.
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Posted 02 December 2008 - 12:31 PM
Been off the raider of a minute. Doing some soul searching and stuff.
See some changes been going round this joint. To be honest its a lot prettier than when I first came round here sample this off the top:
My words my weapons, My options open,
Your mind hiden, My rhymes perfected,
Been rejected in corners unknown to man,
If I were you I would have been a memory,
Voices spoke to me, told me I was more than what mere minds perceived,
Heard that all, coz thats just how trace was concieved,
See some changes been going round this joint. To be honest its a lot prettier than when I first came round here sample this off the top:
My words my weapons, My options open,
Your mind hiden, My rhymes perfected,
Been rejected in corners unknown to man,
If I were you I would have been a memory,
Voices spoke to me, told me I was more than what mere minds perceived,
Heard that all, coz thats just how trace was concieved,
"............Untamed That Is What I Am................................."
"..............Words Are Ma Weapons....................................."
"..............Words Are Ma Weapons....................................."
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Posted 05 December 2008 - 02:33 AM
Have you ever wondered why you are not looked upon as too old if you are a 60 year old drummer in a rock band or a 60 year old R&B singer or even a 60 year old tap dancer? If you can do any of these things as well as many other forms of MUSIC it is not looked upon as strange or weird because all forms of MUSIC are looked at as ADULT forms of art...............except RAP!
I'm talking about people outside of Hip Hop looking in.
Reason: RAP is linked with something kids do. And you are supposed to outgrow it like playing in a childs playground.
I HATE THAT AND WILL NEVER BELIEVE IT. :?
I am new to this site. I have not reached the age of 40 but I was around when Hip Hop started. When there was only New York Hip Hop and nothing else. I listen for years about how rap was a fad and was never going to last. I remembered in the record stores when rap didn't even have a section. Just the letter "R" with fewer item than some people have on there dinner plate. "Rock & Role" just like "Bee Bop" were looked at as childish when they started until the children grew up. When the kids grew, so did the MUSIC. ......But not Hip Hop.
This has nothing to do with money and everything to do with expression.
The expression of Hip Hop is not even close to being as advanced as I thought it would be years ago. I give many artists and friends BIG UPS and NUFF RESPECT. But still......far, far too many children!!!!
Soon....I will show you the difference between MAN and child...
I think GOD for this site.
ONE ! 8)
I'm talking about people outside of Hip Hop looking in.
Reason: RAP is linked with something kids do. And you are supposed to outgrow it like playing in a childs playground.
I HATE THAT AND WILL NEVER BELIEVE IT. :?
I am new to this site. I have not reached the age of 40 but I was around when Hip Hop started. When there was only New York Hip Hop and nothing else. I listen for years about how rap was a fad and was never going to last. I remembered in the record stores when rap didn't even have a section. Just the letter "R" with fewer item than some people have on there dinner plate. "Rock & Role" just like "Bee Bop" were looked at as childish when they started until the children grew up. When the kids grew, so did the MUSIC. ......But not Hip Hop.
This has nothing to do with money and everything to do with expression.
The expression of Hip Hop is not even close to being as advanced as I thought it would be years ago. I give many artists and friends BIG UPS and NUFF RESPECT. But still......far, far too many children!!!!
Soon....I will show you the difference between MAN and child...
I think GOD for this site.
ONE ! 8)
IDEALIST
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Posted 24 December 2008 - 09:11 AM
just sayin that's a Nice talent, great name...this is hiphopheart new on site but not to recite...peace.
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word everybody, Synik is the name, Zim emcee with a love for poetry.In fact Im trying to get into it.So here is a piece to introduce myself
BLACK QUEEN
She sustains life like the river Nile
The universe has gotta pause when she gives a smile
Coz she got the strength of the black race
I find myself staring at the length of her black and beautiful face
She got darkened knees from polishing floors
But it aint hard to see she a positive force
Bucket of water on her head but still carry a child
She diverse keeping her hair in various styles
She is deep like the Kimberly mines
So you couldn uncover her treasures even if you were given the time
And she is humble like the sun in a solar eclipse
Her voice blesses the air like when you blowing a kiss
I see the motion of the ocean in the sway of her hips
A lotta girls but she is the most potent on the list
Mascara doesnt define her
She is divine in her design so on the throne is where you find her
She has so many gifts that her bridal price
Would be a star and the moon if you valued her right
Source of inspiration, 9 months carrying a nation
She my black sista, Original Queen, without an imitation
One
BLACK QUEEN
She sustains life like the river Nile
The universe has gotta pause when she gives a smile
Coz she got the strength of the black race
I find myself staring at the length of her black and beautiful face
She got darkened knees from polishing floors
But it aint hard to see she a positive force
Bucket of water on her head but still carry a child
She diverse keeping her hair in various styles
She is deep like the Kimberly mines
So you couldn uncover her treasures even if you were given the time
And she is humble like the sun in a solar eclipse
Her voice blesses the air like when you blowing a kiss
I see the motion of the ocean in the sway of her hips
A lotta girls but she is the most potent on the list
Mascara doesnt define her
She is divine in her design so on the throne is where you find her
She has so many gifts that her bridal price
Would be a star and the moon if you valued her right
Source of inspiration, 9 months carrying a nation
She my black sista, Original Queen, without an imitation
One
I stay on the plan, resonating from the cradle of man
4get the fame, Im representing for the sake of my fam
4get the fame, Im representing for the sake of my fam
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Posted 03 February 2009 - 12:56 PM
Oops I suppose i aint a newbie no more, but since I never introduced myself proberly, I thought I'd do it now.
His a frontier pioneer, year after year he lead the way from the rear,
He bleeds the way, tear after tear, with a pen in the hand & a beat in the ear
With his mind round an idea & his fist raised to the sky, hear the war cry
Coz he battled his hostilities, until the world could hear the war cry
A sight for sore eyes this swash-buckling buccaneer, without a fear
The migrant pirate on riot patrol, tired on roll towards the poison spear
All the noise in here leak out via the jaws of an outlaw, out for
Revenge against the stench that hang so heavy, on the ground floor
A Vagabond antidote and he cope with empty hope on a thank you note
Plenty spoke but not many wrote, what he had to script on an angry robe
Under lengthy smoke he choked & his train nearly went of the rails
Coz he didn’t sent a message in a bottle to the one he often mails
Stole his coffin nails, paid his bail & made his way out of an earthly jail
Since birth failed, but deserved 2 trail the retail detail of a worthy sale
Just a rolling stone going home to where the hills have eyes & walls ears
Just a rolling stone going home to where the deals less lies & no fears
Thats me The NomadPoet
here's the link 2 my newest mixtape!!!!!!!!!! enjoy!
http://www.4shared.com/file/83219158/cc ... d=8cd1f871
FREE for DOWNLOAD
His a frontier pioneer, year after year he lead the way from the rear,
He bleeds the way, tear after tear, with a pen in the hand & a beat in the ear
With his mind round an idea & his fist raised to the sky, hear the war cry
Coz he battled his hostilities, until the world could hear the war cry
A sight for sore eyes this swash-buckling buccaneer, without a fear
The migrant pirate on riot patrol, tired on roll towards the poison spear
All the noise in here leak out via the jaws of an outlaw, out for
Revenge against the stench that hang so heavy, on the ground floor
A Vagabond antidote and he cope with empty hope on a thank you note
Plenty spoke but not many wrote, what he had to script on an angry robe
Under lengthy smoke he choked & his train nearly went of the rails
Coz he didn’t sent a message in a bottle to the one he often mails
Stole his coffin nails, paid his bail & made his way out of an earthly jail
Since birth failed, but deserved 2 trail the retail detail of a worthy sale
Just a rolling stone going home to where the hills have eyes & walls ears
Just a rolling stone going home to where the deals less lies & no fears
Thats me The NomadPoet
here's the link 2 my newest mixtape!!!!!!!!!! enjoy!
http://www.4shared.com/file/83219158/cc ... d=8cd1f871
FREE for DOWNLOAD
Lyrically Yours
L?
FREE MIXTAPE links LY The NomadPoet Road II EgoliWood 2006 & Lost in Translation 2008, New Blunt Minds Ep coming soooooooon ....
To word fight is my birth right .....
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FREE MIXTAPE links LY The NomadPoet Road II EgoliWood 2006 & Lost in Translation 2008, New Blunt Minds Ep coming soooooooon ....
To word fight is my birth right .....
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Posted 13 February 2009 - 04:24 PM
uhm...uh...*feels like standing up in class on your first day and looking like an idiot whilst everyone stares at you* ...what im trying to say is...well, what id like to say that is...HI... :oops:
i liked your playground so i decided to come over and play.
im a flower and a fairy.
i liked your playground so i decided to come over and play.
im a flower and a fairy.
...i imagine i am a feeling...
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Posted 16 February 2009 - 06:35 AM
the flower fairy said:
uhm...uh...*feels like standing up in class on your first day and looking like an idiot whilst everyone stares at you* ...what im trying to say is...well, what id like to say that is...HI... :oops:
i liked your playground so i decided to come over and play.
im a flower and a fairy.
i liked your playground so i decided to come over and play.
im a flower and a fairy.
Fuck wit' me n' I'ma break u' skull, expose u' brains to reality/
jus' to make u' think outside that box u' call a head/
* I don't only think ahead, but ma' thoughts surpass those of a single head * |Couzifer|
jus' to make u' think outside that box u' call a head/
* I don't only think ahead, but ma' thoughts surpass those of a single head * |Couzifer|
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Posted 18 February 2009 - 10:10 AM
NEW?????????????????????????????
ME>???????????????????????????????
NEVA
GUYS ITS ME WANDA JUS FORGOT MY PASSWORD N SHIT SO HAD TO REG AGAIN
THEME ,.ADDICTIVE .RHYME. KAST1.quentelon etc
WERS EVERYONE
ME>???????????????????????????????
NEVA
GUYS ITS ME WANDA JUS FORGOT MY PASSWORD N SHIT SO HAD TO REG AGAIN
THEME ,.ADDICTIVE .RHYME. KAST1.quentelon etc
WERS EVERYONE
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Posted 03 April 2009 - 11:05 AM
whats up my full names are cornelius leo.first time posting this side of the forum, i hear you guys got rules so enlighten me.
i have seen days which are darker than nights
seen the world cry inform of rain/
seen mother earth's heart broken in form of earthquakes and tremours/
and seen death play jokes on life/ so i know anybody can be touched.
am just playing your! but seriously i want to join this side so hola the rules. word
i have seen days which are darker than nights
seen the world cry inform of rain/
seen mother earth's heart broken in form of earthquakes and tremours/
and seen death play jokes on life/ so i know anybody can be touched.
am just playing your! but seriously i want to join this side so hola the rules. word
BLOOD,SWEET AND TEARS;DEPICT THE POETRY THAT INDUCES YOUR FEARS;
SO TO APPEASE THE DEAD;LET THE POSSESSED DANCE.
SO TO APPEASE THE DEAD;LET THE POSSESSED DANCE.
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Posted 03 April 2009 - 02:05 PM
cornelius said:
whats up my full names are cornelius leo.first time posting this side of the forum, i hear you guys got rules so enlighten me.
Peace.
Fuck wit' me n' I'ma break u' skull, expose u' brains to reality/
jus' to make u' think outside that box u' call a head/
* I don't only think ahead, but ma' thoughts surpass those of a single head * |Couzifer|
jus' to make u' think outside that box u' call a head/
* I don't only think ahead, but ma' thoughts surpass those of a single head * |Couzifer|
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Posted 04 April 2009 - 01:44 PM
thanks couzifer, let me just check the #1 rule. i guess am officilly in. word.
BLOOD,SWEET AND TEARS;DEPICT THE POETRY THAT INDUCES YOUR FEARS;
SO TO APPEASE THE DEAD;LET THE POSSESSED DANCE.
SO TO APPEASE THE DEAD;LET THE POSSESSED DANCE.
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Posted 16 August 2009 - 11:49 PM
whats good ......my name is Smokahontas and i'm a poet from Boston, Mass and North Carolina. i write poetry about things ive seen or heard, people i know , experiences i've had and hell....just straight up imagination.......putting myself in a situation and writing my way out it.......i hope u enjoy reading my work as will I to everyone elses.....see ya in tha threads.......one :twisted:
ink is drawn
to tha paper from my mind
through the pen
tha result is tha state of mind i'm in
.........feel it
to tha paper from my mind
through the pen
tha result is tha state of mind i'm in
.........feel it
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Posted 24 August 2009 - 04:15 AM
checkd in, and wana acknowledge, your presence, catch yall
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Posted 03 December 2009 - 04:23 PM
working from the big corporation in canada
a cubicle that resembles a prison cell
will be set free one day
all my thoughts are
worth the penny
you pay for
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a cubicle that resembles a prison cell
will be set free one day
all my thoughts are
worth the penny
you pay for
them
Copper30
http://copper30.wordpress.com
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Posted 22 August 2010 - 07:54 PM
if ma tongue were guns ma rhymes wil be stray bullet,be penetrating all races even wif a vest,me in tha game is a one bullet gun 2 ur head,u gotta kno FAMOUS like a russian roulette.
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