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[Tanzanite]

wut up yall. this is my first poem on this board, my motha died upon givin birth to me cause she lost too much blood(in tanzania) cause our hospitals werent all that good. so this is a way of me communicatin wit her...it aint finished all the way but, gimme some feed back on some stuff to improve on aight?? thanx yall. very much appreciated.

i once was lost in this wonderfully hideously world
my body, mind and eyes rendered uselesslly into the unknown
my heart, dry as a desert, full of dust. sufferin from thirst
as you were the rain withheld, as i longed for water, while suckin on dry dirt.
i would gaze up at the clear night sky and wonder where you were
did you look at the rising sun and think of me?
my pen and paper and the ink across the page
my only means of escape from this invisible cage.
every shattered emotion pourin outta my heart
with my bruised soul torn apart......


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[SoultheAfricanSistar]

I am sorry about your mother..but I do like your piece....sad but beautiful

every shattered emotion pourin outta my heart
with my bruised soul torn apart......

[bongonian]

it's my first time to read a touching writting in Africanhiphop...pole mzee

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crawling out seeking for helping hands
my life has just been a cloudy sky
every baby's first word couldnt come outta my mouth....mama

[dimplez]

i luv it u have wat a lot of writers dont have today- thats the ability to actually get a visual image through your words. i am able to see your pain and suffrage through your work.post the rest of it up when you're done. i would look forward to seeing more.

[PHEONIX]

Damn.. that was tight mann.. I'm feelin U.