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[unheard voice]

I sat down and started to think
That was my first mistake
Because all the turmoil from my life
And of course everyone else's
Jus comes crashng in
I want to cry
Cry because I can't deal with my own problems
I'm to busy dealing with everyone else's
I call my sister
I want to tell her how I'm feeling
But instead I get an earful
Devestation
That's how my life feels most times
Who's there for me?
Who can I talk to when I start to feel that pain in my chest that just won't go away?
When I can't figure out a solution to my problems
Why must everyone come to me??

[Couzifer]

Damn!...now this is a stressed piece!...I feel the pain in it, the emotions n' all that...n' that's the beauty of poetry. It feels like you wrote this in a spar of a moment...at the correct timing, that's why it came out jus' fine!

[tha high priest]

yeah its touchin a bit sad.sm times thoughts get to heavy but keep writtin it actually helps lessen the weight on yo brain n keep yo head up.

[fikrah]

this is another one describing how sometimes sadness find us no matter how we try being happy

guess it's all about this life vicissitudes....u brought the picture out clearly and big-up 4 that

unheard voice!!!

[oxytim]

I like the title... and the poem does nail it.

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I sat down and started to think
That was my first mistake

I can relate to that... sometimes we curse why we put ideas into our own heads... we shud just proceed with the flow

Nice piece bro

[GodSon]

I sat down and started to think
That was my first mistake
Because all the turmoil from my life
And of course everyone else's
Jus comes crashng in
[/quote] [quote][/quote]I want to cry
Cry because I can't deal with my own problems
I'm to busy dealing with everyone else's[/quote] [quote][/quote]
I call my sister
I want to tell her how I'm feeling
But instead I get an earful
Devestation
That's how my life feels most times
Who's there for me?
Who can I talk to when I start to feel that pain in my chest that just won't go away?
When I can't figure out a solution to my problems
Why must everyone come to me??

[unheard voice]

thanks for the support everyone. I actually wroe this at a time wen it felt like everything was crashing in... my twin sister and i have sperated for the 1st time cus we go 2 different universities and i felt like i had no one to talk to about everything that was goin on in my, as well as some family that comes to me for advice, life... this was a great release... glad u guys like it!

[Bunie124]

good i felt tht

[Kizito]

hypothetical poetry manifest.

i believe writing when you are wedged in the thick of an emotion is.. this... poetry.

blessed be.

Honour

K

[liquid fire]

:-) Wow. and that is why you are a poet. Poets bear the burdens of others. And they can talk to a paper and after that feel better. Consoled by our own words? hmm...?

[bluntedmt510]

that was very sad, and i hear u, especially because it reminded me of a shawty who went through something similar. this brought back all those feelings she confided in me a time ago, so i can somewhat understand and relate vicariously. what really just brought it all together was the simple question "who's there for me?" it makes me want to say keep trying and never give up, no matter what.

[squid]

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Cry because I can't deal with my own problems
I'm to busy dealing with everyone else's

emotions well expressed

[Krash Korse]

Find a Shield in pain. it is a sadistic look. Very attractive piece.

[Siza]

I can definately relate to the pain in this piece. Sometimes I think writing is therapeutic. Nice one. Blessings.

[TeeZeR]

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I want to cry
Cry because I can't deal with my own problems
I'm to busy dealing with everyone else's

Quite an emotional piece...don't know whether to say "nice one" or "things will come out right at the end". Either way, nca piece!