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[relic]

Guess I'll save the pain of having to go and see an introduction about me, or lack there of, so I'll tell you a little bit about this stuff.

I've never written any kind of poetry/hip hop before and tonight I felt like writing whatever came to my head, I didn't construct/edit this in any way. This is the out come. I really enjoyed doing this and want to continue it, possibly even daily.

Sorry for the grammar and layout, typed it up thinking I'd never show anyone.



1. sitting here at my desk, thinking about the

world, people killing raping

stealing and lying, nobody gains like the ones

that are flying, above the rest looking down

upon thee smiting those who cannot see the

truth, the good, the hidden on the earth, are

these people really people or just a hideous

girth, taking from the soil and burning all

the oil, their cars guzzling our history like

the bum's sitting next to me, thrown their

lives away when they chose to close their eyes

and turn away, a blind eye to those who need

two, have you ever really looked and seen you



2.missing the point when they aim their guns,

firing away all the life of one's, war is

death, fear and dispair, fighting for land is

tame until it is bare, seeing the truth for

what it is no man can claim what they want is

for this, villages burning, emptying the

remains of the people that came before it who

learnt to tame the land, take what they needed

and spread the span of their oh so holy clan,

religion? not in this life time, all that is

holy and sacred is now all mine, pushing the

button from 30 thousand miles away the crater

dug deep in one too many ways, erasing the

writings of a people is this not equal to star

wars getting a sequel? 50 million eyes

watching the screen while 6 billion close

their eyes and turn their backs on the world's

that never were, never seen never heard musn't

have been, is this not obscene, little

children can only dream of a different world

but what is to dream when you haven't seen

passed the muzzle flash, brains all over your

families' wall, men standing 6 feet tall

enlisted by free will, memories of a kill

erased by a pill perscribed and paid for in

full by the ones that took the till, stole

more than they knew, to them only blood spilt



3. throwing down the chains of their shackled

oppression, a people uniting to avoid

suffering depression, too many years have

these people taken the heat which was not

equal, nor was it deserved, being born a

different colour, being thrown out like you're

curved, believing in something someone doesn't

makes you more of a target than someone who

smothers their significant others, hate crimes

and genocides all brought on by god who

divided the lives of brothers, creating all

with the intention of loving, oh no can't have

that, bring on the guns with their ratta tat

tat, goodbye friend, brother, no none of those

will do, to me you are only you, i cannot

relate to that which is on your plate, why are

you so different, did you not get the memo?

the man above us said so, no more difference,

difference divides and we as whites will die,

no time for eqaulity when i need to get more

land for me, more food and money for me,

you're a small price to pay to get what i

wanted for my family, little timmy's bike and

little jany's kite, nothing like seeing my

kids play all day and night, while you suffer

in jail rotting away, mother's head on a pike,

no saving you now, you're all in the past,

i'll see you next life where you won't

remember me but i'll still haunt your dreams

where is your queen when my people come up on

the scene, enforcing our laws and way of life

while your kids and your wife pay the price of

something they never bought

4.

when the troops storm in the phallic images reskin the nation's flag while the poor soul's of innocents wave and wag the white sheet that the racists left behind, shedding their skin while they forget the spine that holds people together, children that will never grow up, staying in never never, land of the free is a thing of the past so hold up your hands and hope it don't last

[relic]

Any thoughts at all?

[Couzifer]

First time doing this?!...I mean this is some nice stuff n' if really this is the first time u doing this then u goin' ill...
something tho'...I've been here for a while n' its like pple around here jus' don't like loooong writes...yeah n' also avoid the double spacing from one line to the next.

Then the most important: Give enough feedback to other pple's work n' u' gon' get some love in return.

[relic]

Thanks for your reply man.

Yeah I've never been into poetry or writing lyrics to any of my music.

And yeah it is quite long, that's because I just keep writing what comes to my head. If I wanted to write an actual piece I'd have to cut almost all of it and construct it better.

And the way it's written is just because I did it in MSN to a friend, so I didn't set it out nicely.

Take it easy.

[tha high priest]

Good piece though its a bit long.but there is a lot of reality you have spoken about,too much blood shed over nothin,and a lot of manipulation of the masses by politicians.Anyway its a good piece.keep writin.

[famous]

its ma first time but ya gon be feelin me,respect me like i own a class of nursery.