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[Benjamin Cross]

This system is crazy masses are locked up in cages
political decisions are affecting people of all ages,
even the unborn baby now loses it's right
when we advocate for abortion and take away lives,
potential pastors, entrepreneurs and doctors
but it's ironic coz we killing potential hijakers and robbers
however this doesn't make it right,
coz she myt have had a dream to fight for you human rights....

[Poetic Seraph]

hmmm. short. you have some valid points in there but it seems very superficial. like you jotted down a few thing that you want to put in a future poem. if thats the case, im looking forward to the extended version :D

[fikrah]

yaw cross...u got it straigt 2the point...

Benjamin Cross said:

even the unborn baby now loses it's right
when we advocate for abortion and take away lives,

[BlackMadness]

I like where this piece is going, but like the above poster I feel it's pretty short and seems unfinished.

[Couzifer]

its short...that's right but it got weight! n' I like that! -- everybody can relate to this.

Good work Benjamin