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[mimic truce]

School is in....

Smooth soothing the ooohs, ahhhs luring the mood
a life obscuring to you...but calling , knowing the dues
i was wrapped graciously... subdued
mapped sponteneously within queues
with every concave and stolen look
that ever i did make in a woven move,
in the incrowd stalling for you....
i chose every second of everyday
as a painting weapon n tool
for every meausred perspective you do
when every real is captivated in zoom
and is antisepticly true, this science is medicine school
we'll breath the breath of time in signatures dude
grafiti text breakdancing into the x-sites more leteral
within a singular heart beat...
an individual transitional moment...sweet
foot wading surface, more concrete
but in fact stolen, a whole rhythym from glimpse
thrown into an ingenious Kodac for a musical pic
i got to admit .... it was gracious ley did
now imagine how many seconds you could rip from a lifetime of spit

[Rikambura]

well done nice pice really

[Rikambura]

well done nice pice really

[Poetic Seraph]

i like the smooth flow of this piece; it reads like an observation of a brief moment when all stood still around you and you focused on just one thing; very nice

[relic]

As stated above, the flow of this piece is really nice. Soothing, almost.

Good work. What do you typically write about?

[Couzifer]

mimic truce said:

i chose every second of everyday
as a painting weapon n tool
for every meausred perspective you do
when every real is captivated in zoom
and is antisepticly true, this science is medicine school
we'll breath the breath of time in signatures dude
grafiti text breakdancing into the x-sites more leteral
within a singular heart beat...
an individual transitional moment...sweet
foot wading surface, more concrete

Those be my favorite lines...its a smooth piece no doubt!!!