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[oxytim]

If I were to describe my best friend with words:

I’d use words that started and never ended,
Just as our friendship started,
I’d hope it never ended...

I’d words that paint colours
Colours blue and green
Colours that fade with big blots
Colours that fuse in big drops
Coz my best friend was natural and free
And always full of hope...

Like a trickster,
I’d use magical words and enchanting cards
To keep my best friend smiling
Even if the tricks really weren’t working

Like a lover, I’d use shaky words,
That made you feel insecure,
That made you question your position
And wonder why you should keep reading,
But coz you were my best friend
You’d learn to move on
Coz I don’t intend any true harm...

If I were a PHd holder,
I’d mix Afrikaans words with West African ones
Create a slung used by car guards and barmen,
Because to everyone else,
They’d completely make no sense
Except to my best friend

It would be hard, but I’d try
To use big words with clever pronunciation
That would make people listen,
To understand detail,
Coz they’d remind me that complex things
Can have simple meanings
Like my best friends smile,
You’d only learn to appreciate them in due time..

to define time, I’d use words that people normally use
To talk about alarm clocks and hour glasses,
That remind every one of the female body,
And pour white sand,
That inspires one to travel,
To far away beaches and distant racist lands
Coz every-time my best friend took a trip,
A blank space was left,
Not only in distance but also in time,
Life then moved on,
We acted like it was all fine...

Like a rich elite,
I’d use shiny diamond words,
And polished punctuated gems
To describe the diamond in stone,
Because if I never did,
I’d have walked away
And would never have known...
The heart of my best friend was made of diamond

From a passionate and dedicated philosopher,
I’d quote famous words that spoke,
About opportunities, fate and future possibilities
Not because I’ll believe them,
But coz I know my best friend will.

If I had gone to medical school
I’d use complicated medical terms
To prescribe a prescription,
Every time my best friend was feeling ill or feeling blue
But I went to design school,
Like my best friend did for me,
I’ll be there till they came through
No matter what, even if it were only flu...

I’d go slow and use simple words,
I’d write them down, coz thats who I am,
I’d use those words to explain my emotions in a way I understand
Because to my best friend,
I’d have a duty to explain...

Most of all I’d use words I once thought normal,
Words that now bear extraordinary meaning
Stomach and wine, Love and lone
Colour and trust, smile and home
Without them, Like my best friend,
Life would never be the same.

If ever the time came,
And my best friend decided,
Like a man I’d use honest words,
To mean thanks and to say bye,
Words that would lift me high,
And let me walk with pride...

[oxytim]

Sorry guys haven't been here in ages... Was in one of those 'blocked zones'

[Poetic Seraph]

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Like a trickster,
I’d use magical words and enchanting cards
To keep my best friend smiling
Even if the tricks really weren’t working

so sweet, I could actually imagine this friend sitting there, watching you with a smile on his/her face, just because you are trying

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Coz every-time my best friend took a trip,
A blank space was left,
Not only in distance but also in time,
Life then moved on,
We acted like it was all fine...

and the dots make you understand that every time your friend travels, you suffer, because he/she's not there to hang out with you and all you can do is wait

The poem is very sweet. you used a few cliches and I've seen better work from you. i also found it a bit long... like 'ok we get the message already'. but in the end, it's just a very sweet poem, that made me smile :)

[oxytim]

Yeah, i guess it is really long... i wantd to trim in down by half, never got the chance to... besides that every time i read it, it had these little ciches that one of my good friend and i laugh about... so i kinda didnt like gettin rid of them... will get a shorter version i suppose

[Couzifer]

Yeah...its really long!!! but sweet and rewarding...cleverly written.

I think the length of this piece is an indication / description of how much your friend means to you...like at the end of it no words can really explain / describe!!!...

I like it, I really does!

[fikrah]

...words unspoken speak more than the spoken words...

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To use big words with clever pronunciation
That would make people listen,
To understand detail,
Coz they’d remind me that complex things
Can have simple meanings
Like my best friends smile,
You’d only learn to appreciate them in due time..

...
yes, they speak and mean a lot

a true poet you are!!!

[tha high priest]

A very nice and touching piece,clever word play and creativity.keep inkin.

[revolt]

dude it hit home