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[fikrah]

You stay in the ark of stillness,
Long after the floods dried out
In tiny compartments, your generation suffers
Scared to come out
Scared to peep out
Souls starving, minds starving, bodies starving
Of the aforesaid – scarcity in plenty,
You were robbed, I understand – enslaved
And left at the mercy of inferiority complex
Upon alien culture of the uncultured,
For they made you walk barefoot, not on soft grass
But on shards of broken glass
Walk! And when you fall, they force you to your feet
Again and again; to them what a feat!
Like the overseers of your journey to Golgotha.
How your past remain so glorious and resplendent
Your kingdoms great, of knowledge transcendent
Let it trickle like water droplets
To quench generation’s mind thirst.
To awaken the warrior spirit in us
Arrows and spears, more casualties
For they shall no longer live on their knees!

[MC Qham]

fikrah said:

You stay in the ark of stillness,
Long after the floods dried out
In tiny compartments, your generation suffers
Scared to come out
Scared to peep out
Souls starving, minds starving, bodies starving

THIS OPENER got me wow!its like being taken back in time yet its something contemporary!damn,its a challenge to all us....

fikrah said:

scarcity in plenty, 8)
You were robbed (they took our treasures,installed them in their own countries then claim,they pioneered education and all! they suffer from superiority complex!
I understand – enslaved
And left at the mercy of inferiority complex
Upon alien culture of the uncultured,
For they made you walk barefoot, not on soft grass
But on shards of broken glass

:idea:

neo-colonialism,controlled by the systems they infiltrated and power comes from above,from financial to political control!we say, they determine.they determine they incorporate!!damn!!slavery!!
THIS some deep shit mein!i love these lines.actually my favorite lines in the piece!

fikrah said:

Walk! And when you fall, they force you to your feet
Again and again; to them what a feat!

:cry:

fikrah said:

Like the overseers of your journey to Golgotha.
How your past remain so glorious and respondent
Your kingdoms great trickle like water droplets
To quench generation’s mind thirst.
To awaken the warrior spirit in us
Arrows and spears, more casualties
For they shall no longer live on their knees!

that finishing made all round summary to the challenge of working hard to free ourselves to these invisible chains :wink:

deep piece cuz!!

[fikrah]

thanks mc qham...you know what it is...word brotha!!!

[Couzifer]

I thot I commented on this?!...ok...

First the subject is poetry in itself...it puts a very interestin twist to the biblical ark as we know it...it was made to shelter and protect life from destruction...but the "stillness" part of it is wat gives this piece its flavor...

fikrah said:

You stay in the ark of stillness,
Long after the floods dried out
In tiny compartments, your generation suffers

wat is made to save u turns against u'...its an horrific experience n' its happening everyday everywhere on this planet earth!

fikrah said:

Of the aforesaid – scarcity in plenty,

Well thot!...I wish I wrote that myself...I envy!!!

fikrah said:

For they made you walk barefoot, not on soft grass
But on shards of broken glass

Did anyone say that out loud like I did?!...n' felt the flow n' rhyme in it?!...thats a special delivery which carries alot of weight in it...

fikrah said:

How your past remain so glorious and resplendent
Your kingdoms great, of knowledge transcendent
Let it trickle like water droplets
To quench generation’s mind thirst.
To awaken the warrior spirit in us
Arrows and spears, more casualties
For they shall no longer live on their knees!

Now that's a courageous write...I like the ending for the strength it leaves me with.

Nice write bro!...keep more comin'.

Peace.

[fikrah]

couz...yeah yeah...mad love alwayz....big up big bro. word!!!

[tha high priest]

Man thats a deep poem.Its actually the reality we still mentally enslaved,economically,culturally.But we gotta keep our minds opened to enable freedom.Nway nice piece.

[fikrah]

thanks high priest...you are a bratha 4 real, can't forget when we met...a bratha so down-to-earth. blessings and peace!!!

[brooks]

i like the fact that u av taken our minds to a place where poets like my not sooo humble self tend to avoid!
welcome to AHH. i see u already know poets here...

[MC Qham]

good to see you back Brooks! :wink:

[fikrah]

i appreciate your support brothers, mc qham and brooks big up men...am proud at the same time humbled to be part of AHH...I read the rules and promise to comment on other poets work on AHH...soon as possible...thanks people!!!

[d2]

SCRITS of DOPENESS.

[cornelius]

amazing dopeness!
black proud and pretty we are!

[fikrah]

thanks 2 tha poets cornelius and d2....!!!

[vnorm]

enough's been said man. This shows a lot of potential in you. Been talking to Qham about you and I too agree that you have serious stuff in you. Write more and leave us to drop u feed.

welcome poet.

[fikrah]

vnorm, i appreciate your support brother!!!