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[MC Qham]

:idea:
Big dreams,King Luther schemes,
Visions streams,hungry kids screams,
My mind thorned bleeding,tears eyes seeping,
Demons on my mind limping,
…Cringed, bruised - wishing!
I wasn’t thinking, busting thru stitches,
Am on my grind chasin (paper),
Afterwards holdin my pen shitting,
Pages inking,imaginations link me,
To abandoned secrets and Sink me,voices speak to me,
Bout streets stinking,killin yung kids with hunger,
Leaders greed – sparking anger!,
Gun shots,hustlers on tha corner clobbered,
Dads smell liquor sons sober!,
Atrocity soaked up,with invisible arms,
Politricks scums!clowns charm run up n down dumb!,
Numb catch us up!
Frozen mental cells,
Illusions playing safe mind sex games,
Minds Raped,ideologies conceive scraped genes,
Worn out fiends
Sins Shot in naked scenes,
Atrocious blocks hide drugs n immoral themes,
Pre-Sodom Gommorah!
Imageries, its all horror,
Prayers futile, God disgusted
Streets graffiti walls explain in broader sense
Jesus on the cross bleeding, pain sinks,
Cranium blistered,in a mist I try to dither,
Moses Elijah,
Holding talks with God to release us prisoners!
Thru the fall we all come to terms,
Prophets sent, Spit psalms,
Proverbs meant to free third eyes open up,.,
….to create Words n pictures in poetry –
….of a sick society!
................................................AFTERWORD :wink: ............................................................
Am dedicating this work to Couzfire,after inspiring me with his debut piece "...sun goes down!". Now son goes down to work,God bless all y'all poets who keep symbiotically elavatin us up,honestly we couldnt hold it up n up without the blessings n upbringing of each other.Y'all like art-brothers to me. Peace. :D

[Couzifer]

Damn son! Im humbled...I mean it u on some new levels...this piece feels jus raw like giving the reader a chance to tap into your thoughts while u was writing this n I like that feeling. Will quote some lines wen I be on a comp...

Great write!

[Rikambura]

nice piece,1

[Couzifer]

MC Qham said:

Big dreams,King Luther schemes,
Visions streams,hungry kids screams,
My mind thorned bleeding,tears eyes seeping,
Demons on my mind limping,
…Cringed, bruised - wishing!

That opener was on point, I like this new style you developing of breaking lines into small bits...it gives flavor to the poem...

MC Qham said:

Frozen mental cells,
Illusions playing safe mind sex games,
Minds Raped,ideologies conceive scraped genes,
Worn out fiends
Sins Shot in naked scenes,
Atrocious blocks hide drugs n immoral themes,

....you are sick with the flow and rhymes bro...keep it up!

This is an overall nice write...would like to see more like this...lets keep growing poetically.

Peace.

[MC Qham]

Couzifer said:

This is an overall nice write...would like to see more like this...lets keep growing poetically.

thank bro,gotta say;as we keep on gettin challenged we keep on developin new ideas,new styles of writin,new insights..AHH is surely the place to be..wud like to see more feeds on this piece tho.. :x

[Couzifer]

MC Qham said:

wud like to see more feeds on this piece tho..

U's right bro...people been slackin' wit em feedbacks of late...that I've noticed...I feel that alot pple here been carried away by facebook such that they aint got time for this place :( ...its sad u kno'?!...really sad!

[MC Qham]

Couzifer said:

...its sad u kno'?!...really sad!

:( :( n :evil: :evil: