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[MC Qham]

I know that wooden box wasn't meant for me
Atleast not yet,but I know mortality gotta be!
Last fate! Always reaching for death
U give up hope you self inflict and cut the strings of life
Fall down ripe
Body frozen up, lyin on ya back iced!
The flange of poetry got me cruising towards victory
Though we indebted, look at the city mortuary
Bodies rolled up wrapped, gassed OUT - duty free
Legislative lunacy, it aint rumors see..
How the toll goes up is still a mystery
Tongues call out the Holy Spirit to come 2 the rescue, the old cynics flee
Caught up in an ecstasy, I smile with glee
My life is free, but look how they asking me, for a choice amicably
The devil passed me some candles when I was 15 in the form of weed
You cant blame me,blame him the son of the morning
My War is solemn, coz my left part of my head was stolen
Didn’t know I was gone burry the genes of my blood
His waist’s sprouting Bud, I am, the pride of his charm
An orphan half way, in a thirsty age making bones rotten,
Nasty rage lust for me, am torn between paper and pen
I gotta share a token, that’s why I keep inkin these pages
My flow Depicted celibate, took ages and rages to give birth to this poet
Delegate reign insane fate relegate,
Like a coffin goin deep 6 feet
Marked sedans,tinted completing the final journey of leech (death)
They call him death, life snatching, he keeps
Scare crows on my head,tears dried on my lids
Formed crystals shining, my heart mantra rhyming
Its 1905 finding, my enemy armed with human bones,
That he took, and look how am letting brains crush and vanish
Coz idealistic veins cut spontaneously causing miscarriages
Savages smile, when am withstanding orphan ages
It comes metamorphically in different stages
Cemeteries images,skeletons awakening,my knees weakening
Heart racing,in hertz pacing,they contesting to reach for me
But tomorrow’s a goodday,am still hoping hip
Am goin deep,bursting in the earth’s atmosphere,
Fallin towards my body,angels form a sphere
U thought it was the second coming of the ancient Messiah
Am finally here,its dreams coz streams of light hit my eyes
My bed king size!disguised,camouflaged,prepared cheetah style! :lol:

[vnorm]

i already dropped feed on this on FB but once again wont hurt. This some light piece which on second read has lotsa depth to it. I like how you take a grave topic like death and make a light twist to it.
Keep inking homeboy.

[Couzifer]

I like it...I definitely do!...I like the flow and how you maintained the meaning in it...I see you improving on the structure and punctuation too which is really great.

Tho' at some point it feels more of a rhyme than it is a poem..but its all good bro...great concept...nice twists in it!!!

[MC Qham]

vnorm said:

i already dropped feed on this on FB but once again wont hurt. This some light piece which on second read has lotsa depth to it. I like how you take a grave topic like death and make a light twist to it.
Keep inking homeboy.

the archaic touch to it got me excited and inspired, thnx bro!

Couzifer said:

I like it...I definitely do!...I like the flow and how you maintained the meaning in it...I see you improving on the structure and punctuation too which is really great.

Tho' at some point it feels more of a rhyme than it is a poem..but its all good bro...great concept...nice twists in it!!!

thnx 4 lettin me know bout the structure,as usual it was one of my main concerns!and it s great to learn that its improved :D thnx a mil, a god brother in deed!!! :wink:

[Couzifer]

MC Qham said:

thnx 4 lettin me know bout the structure,as usual it was one of my main concerns!and it s great to learn that its improved :D thnx a mil, a god brother in deed!!! :wink:

u' alwayz welcome bro...that's how we keep it goin...elevatin'.

[cornelius]

what emotion! my eyes twitched with empty tears because mortality has always been a clowd on my sunshine,
so much to do yet so little time.
i liked every bit of it!
once we are, then again we not!
we are evanscent images, fading away with time!

MC Qham said:

I know that wooden box wasn't meant for me
Atleast not yet,but I know mortality gotta be!

[MC Qham]

its sad that last fate is always reaching for death,we got a little time but if we really make use of it,towards being constructive,we'll def sum it up with a load of achievement! :wink: