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[tha high priest]

Why do i feel pain
When i see ma brother gain

Shouldn't i work hard
So i can also get paid

Instead am content with sulkin
At every chance i be gossipin

I should lend a helpin hand
But i'd rather see you on the ground

Wishin others to fail
Only leaves me at the tail

Who is this culprit
Burdening my heart

With a weights thats so heavy
I think i found him.Its ENVY.

[vnorm]

this poem had a smooth simple flow to it that was a lil break to all the encryption cats been doing in the forums. That means I think its a good 1. You took time to read it through before putting it up. awesome.

Envy and discontent is the killer to all good things. I so feel that right now coz Im feeling real discontent with an important person and i hate myself for it.

keep writing man.

[MC Qham]

tha high priest said:

Why do i feel pain
When i see ma brother gain



Who is this culprit
Burdening my heart

With a weights thats so heavy
I think i found him.Its ENVY.

it tells it all bro,you tackled a social vice that's eatin up every little bit of success from all angles.reminds me of an article i read over the weekend that talked about an envy scale especially at a work place!great piece,simple flow,easy to read and understand,strong message.thnx!4 sayin it :D 1

[tha high priest]

thanx 4 tha feeds brothers.yea its true what vnorm is sayin guys are usin to much encryption u cant gettin what they sayin.poetry doesnt have to be complex as long as u passin on a reasonable message.

[Couzifer]

tha high priest said:

guys are usin to much encryption u cant gettin what they sayin

Tru' dat...and I'm liking this poem jus' as it is...simple like that...no need for explanation!

I think envy lives within everyone of us...in a good or bad way...the question is which way envy be takin' you?!

[tha high priest]

yea couz dats tru envy lies in all of us .but guess its up to us to have the will to control it.

[MC Qham]

tha high priest said:

guess its up to us to have the will to control it.

true dat!

[oxytim]

Interesting piece, someone realises the problem but is a little reluctant to change their actions and attitudes...

When i read the first lines

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Why do i feel pain
When i see ma brother gain

I thought about betrayal,
then

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Shouldn't i work hard
So i can also get paid

made me think of some one that really wants to get to be on the same level with people above him
then

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Instead am content with sulkin
At every chance i be gossipin

made me change my mind again... i stopped reread the title and then it hit me. The first line reminded me of Kane and Abel... and a new train of thought emerged. I think it's a good piece.

[fikrah]

high priest...this poem is informative and shuns this deep-rooted vice which is seldom noticed in our society...
people must work and emulate the ones worth..."envy is poisonous". thanks for reminding us!!!

[brooks]

high priest! that sounds like d name of a beer.....
i like d fact that u wrote on envy.. thats something we all suffer from but never agree we do.
we all are envious..... somehow

[GodSon]

tha high priest said:

Who is this culprit
Burdening my heart

With a weights thats so heavy
I think i found him.Its ENVY.

now those were the "mind stinging stanzas" 8)






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