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[thaddaeus]

I can see you are aware of it's presence,shattered though.
These shards of Christ must cut deep,it is not your fault,a simple illusion and nothing more.
You can not imagine the deception light hides,but sturdy is a hand with pitch in it's shade.
Let us take this shadow for a walk,and i promise unless asked i will follow your lead.
However child i must ask,what is it that you hold in your other hand?

[vnorm]

short, precise and really hard hitting. It left me a bit confused about what exactly you meant. The first three lines sound to me like you trying to inform your subject on the loopholes/shatters that make his/her belief a lie.
I got lost when u said ' let us take this shadow for a walk' coz initially you hadnt mentioned anything to do with a shado. I think if you shed light on this shadow (lol) then it'll make clear the whle piece.
There's certainly a lot to this. Big up.

peace.

[vnorm]

do drop some feed on the poetry battle page