So fond of you in deep affection
want you in every acception
cause with you there is no deception
without you there would be abnegation
am seriously lost in translation
my speech mumbles like bubbles
for you are hot
as a volcano
and am about to erupt
this love is spell bound
like an ocean of passion deeper than the red sea
am a slave but not in chains
so i became a political prisoner when i decided to become a candidate for your love
it seems so right like speaking from my eyes and watching from my lip but right and never dies like a flower produce from my tulips
this feeling is unbelievable like a man riding on a clould
invoked ad choked
pocessed by thy beauty for its my coke
my soul in deep scotch
am getting high as her love is a fancy rocket that elevates
i have planted a butterfly in you
and i want to abort this concepton
cause from my heart am bleeding out this issues
you walked into earth to steal the hearts of men
for your the fugitive and am the inspector
chasing after you like bee needs nectar
like a treasure chest in my heart
guided by love
we
fell in
eloped
made love in jupiter and fell down to earth
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Love or lust
Started by adinoyi, Mar 15 2010 09:49 AM
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Posted 15 March 2010 - 02:16 PM
adinoyi said:
So fond of you in deep affection
want you in every acception
cause with you there is no deception
without you there would be abnegation
am seriously lost in translation
my speech mumbles like bubbles
for you are hot
as a volcano
and am about to erupt
this love is spell bound
like an ocean of passion deeper than the red sea
am a slave but not in chains
so i became a political prisoner when i decided to become a candidate for your love
it seems so right like speaking from my eyes and watching from my lip but right and never dies like a flower produce from my tulips
this feeling is unbelievable like a man riding on a clould
invoked ad choked
pocessed by thy beauty for its my coke
my soul in deep scotch
am getting high as her love is a fancy rocket that elevates
want you in every acception
cause with you there is no deception
without you there would be abnegation
am seriously lost in translation
my speech mumbles like bubbles
for you are hot
as a volcano
and am about to erupt
this love is spell bound
like an ocean of passion deeper than the red sea
am a slave but not in chains
so i became a political prisoner when i decided to become a candidate for your love
it seems so right like speaking from my eyes and watching from my lip but right and never dies like a flower produce from my tulips
this feeling is unbelievable like a man riding on a clould
invoked ad choked
pocessed by thy beauty for its my coke
my soul in deep scotch
am getting high as her love is a fancy rocket that elevates
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Posted 15 March 2010 - 02:20 PM
these lines carried alot of weight for me,word :wink: !
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Posted 31 August 2010 - 04:54 PM
This is so beautiful. I love the metaphors that you used
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Posted 01 September 2010 - 09:13 AM
No doubt this is a beautiful work of poetry.
Some rhymes felt forced tho' especially the first stanza...u didn't "let it flow" but u "made it flow"...I guess you get the difference;
Overall a nice write!
Some rhymes felt forced tho' especially the first stanza...u didn't "let it flow" but u "made it flow"...I guess you get the difference;
adinoyi said:
So fond of you in deep affection
want you in every acception
cause with you there is no deception
without you there would be abnegation
am seriously lost in translation
want you in every acception
cause with you there is no deception
without you there would be abnegation
am seriously lost in translation
Overall a nice write!
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Posted 02 September 2010 - 12:59 PM
nice description...that's how it usually feels...
the flow is okay...keep it up!!!
two thumbs up.
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you walked into earth to steal the hearts of men
for your the fugitive and am the inspector
chasing after you like bee needs nectar
like a treasure chest in my heart
guided by love
for your the fugitive and am the inspector
chasing after you like bee needs nectar
like a treasure chest in my heart
guided by love
the flow is okay...keep it up!!!
two thumbs up.
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Posted 09 September 2010 - 03:51 AM
Aint that right!!
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Posted 18 September 2010 - 12:51 PM
love or lust... there are some words in this piece dat i had never came across.. funny
but i think its both though. how do you explain the physical attraction thst u mostimes hope to transform into something non physical?... it starts with wat u see dont it? nice write addy
but i think its both though. how do you explain the physical attraction thst u mostimes hope to transform into something non physical?... it starts with wat u see dont it? nice write addy
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Posted 28 October 2010 - 08:55 PM
love or lust... lust i say...
But overall good write.
But overall good write.
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Posted 29 October 2010 - 04:39 PM
adinoyi said:
am a slave but not in chains
so i became a political prisoner when i decided to become a candidate for your love
we
fell in
eloped
made love in jupiter and fell down to earth
so i became a political prisoner when i decided to become a candidate for your love
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we
fell in
eloped
made love in jupiter and fell down to earth
sweet!
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