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[cornelius]

Hold me near like the night holds the day
show me compassion like water does to thirst
my days run in phases of never ending tests
my voice hymns to the melody of misery.
I stand with shrugged sholders like wilting daffodils
In life but dying so constantly.
I find solace in forsaken hallways
Places where my kind mingle with broken hearts.
A place where hope has grown lifeless like desert sands
Farmily knows me not
friends know me not!
Am that stranger dressed in rags,
Am that lover torn to shreads,
Am your neighbour lost with words,
Am that soul looking for a heart that cares
hold me near

[MC Qham]

cornelius said:

I find solace in forsaken hallways
Places where my kind mingle with broken hearts.


Am that stranger dressed in rags,
Am that lover torn to shreads,
Am your neighbour lost with words,
Am that soul looking for a heart that cares
hold me near

these were my favorite lines the first two were very nice,
towards the end i felt the essence of the whole piece even more and appreciated it as if you read the ugly moments when we need the embrace and a shoulder to lean on ....hold us near that is lol..nice piece cornelius good to see you blessin us again with beautiful poetry.by the way i wanted to post my piece but when i saw yours i decided to let yours get the attention and generous read from poets around let em feeds come in then i'ma drop mine after that atmosphere is exhausted,word. :wink:

[unheard voice]

I can't explain why but this poem makes me sad. Is that your attention?? I really like it. Keep up the good work

[MC Qham]

unheard voice said:

I can't explain why but this poem makes me sad. Is that your attention??

:roll: dont misquote me..cornelius i hope you understand what i meant by

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i decided to let yours get the attention and generous read from poets around let em feeds come in then i'ma drop mine after that atmosphere is exhausted

peace.

[cornelius]

Quan good looking out bra, unheard voice, am talking about moments when life seems too hard to bare, thats why the sad reality.

[Couzifer]

cornelius said:

Hold me near like the night holds the day
show me compassion like water does to thirst
my days run in phases of never ending tests

I got to love that especially the first line...day and night are always together infact they is no line between day and night!...they just blend together...its not like you blink and its already dark...now thats holding near...

I love the emotions in this piece...they can be felt with every line of the poem...and thats the beauty of poetry...it got to penetrate / absorb into the reader's mind!!!

Nice write man!