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[The NomadPoet]

Pirates of the sunsets
admirals of dry rivers
we set sale on the last droplets of water
impure from death & deciet, we breathe envy

whether high tide or no tights
we splendour in anger
as the calm of her seas crash on the shores
we empty stores and bent her on fours

her clouds cover our shine
the suns of father time
trapped in the illusion of a begining and end
syringing our pre-sence

the boatmen to Agartha
could be the captain of the slave ships
the commander of the space ships
the programmer of the shape shifts

the Merchant of Venice
could be the Christpoher Columbus
or Marco Polo with the Golden Compass
a journey across the edge of the oceans

we stink from all the potions
allow ourselves to sink in false emotions
we creat relations we tend to slip
cuase within those relations we aim to own a ship ....

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[Couzifer]

I can't really figure out wut u's really talking about here (a part from owning a ship literaly) but one thing is certain...your rhymes are on point and I liked the flow!!!

I think this is a very "twisted" poem and many people here couldn't figure it out jus' like me thats why its remained wit no reply for more than two weeks!!!

Could you please shed some light?!...anyone?!

[vnorm]

I get like you are playing with the whole 'Pirate' idea. describing Pirates on dry land. Like the sea of love (once it runs dry, of course?

The last line play on relationships was the give-away. Otherwise the piece had nothing to lead someone to what you were describing thus even though I realize its a really refreshing piece, with witty play

The NomadPoet said:

we stink from all the potions
allow ourselves to sink in false emotions

(MY FAV LINES, BY THE WAY), the piece was daunting for most readers, I guess.

Maybe the title should have been more revealing. Other that that, this is a doooope piece, my brother. I like it.
Thumbs up and write more.

[vnorm]

another thing, the cynicism is amazing man. Ive ready alot of poems about people mocking love but this one here is on another level bro.
props.

[The NomadPoet]

@ vnorm ... u'r right its a poem bout mocking love, but not in the sense most people would relate ....

see, the title firtsly:

Own a Ship ... is a play on ownership ....

in the opening two lines I connect two very different relationships, a Pirate with the sunset and a Admiral with dry river beds, both of which is in a sense ironic since they seek the opposite of what I link em with...

quatrains two and three is talking bout men's relationship with Kaya .. the Earth Goddess or Mother Earth and how we have contnued raping and savaging her children....

In the next two quatrains the idea is to connect the mythical stories of Ancient times with the more closer to the present written history of mankind and the hidden truths behind it .....


The last quatrain is basicly the moment of self sacrifice that man need to go through in order for ultimate spiritual cleansing ...

Thats my own interpretation, but as with all my material I'm just a witness of the Glory of the ONE and the power of words, therefore the poem is just what it is ..

Tat Tvam Asi

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