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[thaddaeus]

More to this than you could ever know by simply speaking thoughts aloud i lost control,of everything i hoped would never let me go, and it was you.

Tell me why you need to know the name of every portrait i have ever tried to paint,and give me reason to resist that silly game we call the truth.

What a foolish woman you are.

[Poetic Seraph]

short but strong. it doesnt really feel like a poem, more like u jotting down some afterthoughts after this foolish woman left the room... or the relationship. i'd like to see this worked out more. very interesting concept

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Tell me why you need to know the name of every portrait i have ever tried to paint

i like that

[unheard voice]

simple and deep. i love it

[TeeZeR]

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simple and deep. i love it

Same here, i wouldn't mind reading more of these everyday! Niiiice!

[vnorm]

another good poem, Thud. The painting line was a quotable. The first line took me long to figure and when I did, i realized what a gem it was. Back to structure.
Peace.

[Kizito]

wow...

handina mashoko..

Out of words (shona)

But like V said, structure would be invaluable... and like P.S. said... i think you could build more on what you started.

can we look forward to a full length item??

[thaddaeus]

doubt it,we kissed and made up...but then again she is(insert venomous adjective here)so chances are i'll always screw something up around her :P ...

[b boy]

u in love right.....yo poem is deep nd reeks of truth.....we should all do afterthought jottn when ever a foolish woman leaves the room..............:)...u inspire....