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[cornelius]

Scattered thoughts echo my mind with your cologne,
Such pleasant memories I have,
But nostalgia hurts like peeling the mesh off a wound…….
You burn my memories with your existence,
You impregnated my hopes and aborted them before conception,
Now i lie asunder like kingdoms torn by war,
An abstract example of what happens when love collides with lust,
I thought we would blend intimately like night and day,
But you left me in seclusion immured to my loneliness,
What nonsense to love and not be loved back,
You drained my hopes like a sponge,
How could you just move on, like I was not a great loss?
Am I just another emblem on your tapestry of spoils?

They are playing that song again!
Yes the same one we play each anniversary,
Only that tonight I dine with my shadow and your unevanescent memories,
My heart grieves with loneliness like a lone star at the mercy of a stormy sky.
Oh lonely soul of mine, why do quiver for what you cant keep?
Why do you torment me with yesterday’s smile?
When today frowns!

[Couzifer]

Emotions fly high in this piece...its sad how love can turn so cruel sometimes.

cornelius said:

You impregnated my hopes and aborted them before conception,
Now i lie asunder like kingdoms torn by war,
An abstract example of what happens when love collides with lust,

I'm loving this write, its jus' clear and easy to digest.

[vnorm]

cornelius said:

They are playing that song again!
Yes the same one we play each anniversary,
Only that tonight I dine with my shadow and your unevanescent memories,

damn. man the emotion in this piece is heavy. I can feel with you the kind of hurt you going through.
Write it away.

[41Trippa]

Between lust and love ... a bold, thin line. Said so well .. this an an "air out" .. a lot of perfume and cologne up in here. Very nice!!

[cornelius]

good looking out gents, i have been away for a while so i guess its time i pay my respect to the lattest writes. 1

[Ghostic]

Yeah really emotional piece,another sad love story.I really love the word plays and metaphors 'clear and easy to digest' like Couzifer said.

Keep on with the pen poet.

[Poetic Seraph]

ooow my! This poem is soooooo emotional! Every word bends under the emotions.

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But nostalgia hurts like peeling the mesh off a wound…….

what a metaphore! everybody feels how that peeling off feels. U had me think on it for a while, that's exactly how nostalgia feels like!

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You burn my memories with your existence,
You impregnated my hopes and aborted them before conception,
Now i lie asunder like kingdoms torn by war,

love this

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What nonsense to love and not be loved back,
You drained my hopes like a sponge,
How could you just move on, like I was not a great loss?
Am I just another emblem on your tapestry of spoils?

I so know the feeling. You are suffering like someone took your heart out of your chest while it was still beating, and the other one moves on like nothing happened. painful.

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They are playing that song again!
Yes the same one we play each anniversary,
Only that tonight I dine with my shadow and your unevanescent memories,
My heart grieves with loneliness like a lone star at the mercy of a stormy sky.
Oh lonely soul of mine, why do quiver for what you cant keep?
Why do you torment me with yesterday’s smile?
When today frowns!

*sigh*

[MC Qham]

cornelius said:

You impregnated my hopes and aborted them before conception,
Now i lie asunder like kingdoms torn by war,

i salute

cornelius said:

They are playing that song again!
Yes the same one we play each anniversary,
Only that tonight I dine with my shadow and your unevanescent memories,
My heart grieves with loneliness like a lone star at the mercy of a stormy sky.
Oh lonely soul of mine, why do quiver for what you cant keep?
Why do you torment me with yesterday’s smile?
When today frowns!

damn!sooo emotional

i ovate man! :)

[BlaqSpid3r]

i love this piece, and everything about it, i love the passion and the intensity of pain behind it.

well written!!!