Before I could enter the world of love
I saw her.
Meant that my eyes beheld her beauty
And felt her.
Flowing in the streams of blood to the heart.
That’s when everything in my world came to light.
Saw the moon and took my flight
Ger beauty shone like diamond
A light so bright, it covered all
Outward glamour.
Didn’t see anything else
Just me, her and maybe vision from a small range.
A moment of oblivion
Coz with her young tender hands
She flowed and caressed.
Gave me all I wanted
Coz we were all new to the game.
Call me an addict
Her bosom so sweet like cocaine…
(BEFORE IT ALL DAWNED TO ME)
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Started by MC Qham, Aug 20 2009 02:58 PM
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Posted 20 August 2009 - 02:58 PM
Foreign seeds invaded virgin city
9th month maturity made men explore civilization
They cut my umbilical cord and dumped me in the streets of atrocities...
To include me in the statistics of the 20th century!
9th month maturity made men explore civilization
They cut my umbilical cord and dumped me in the streets of atrocities...
To include me in the statistics of the 20th century!
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Posted 04 September 2009 - 12:01 PM
Something about the topic...it doesn't fit this poem...I mean after reading both pieces (part 1 and part 2) I couldn't relate either of them to the topic. You had a good concept and your imagery was on point, the personification of life made this pieces interesting...its only the topic...its also not catchy (somehow makes the reader to hesitate before reading).
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Fuck wit' me n' I'ma break u' skull, expose u' brains to reality/
jus' to make u' think outside that box u' call a head/
* I don't only think ahead, but ma' thoughts surpass those of a single head * |Couzifer|
jus' to make u' think outside that box u' call a head/
* I don't only think ahead, but ma' thoughts surpass those of a single head * |Couzifer|
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Posted 16 January 2010 - 03:24 PM
Couzifer said:
Something about the topic...it doesn't fit this poem...I mean after reading both pieces (part 1 and part 2) I couldn't relate either of them to the topic. You had a good concept and your imagery was on point, the personification of life made this pieces interesting...its only the topic...its also not catchy (somehow makes the reader to hesitate before reading).
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Posted 18 January 2010 - 11:12 PM
i see.. hehe 'lifes a bitch and then u die' - AZ/Nas
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Posted 21 January 2010 - 02:04 PM
Nur said:
i see.. hehe 'lifes a b***h and then u die' - AZ/Nas
thnx nur (nice name)
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