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[FoOtNiNjA]

I been waitin for 2 months now its time 4 your decision/ Its either yes or no ,like askin teachers for permission/ You been on and off like the breakin of transmission/ Put me in your life or cut me off like circumsission/ You know I love u though without you its like in prison/ You know I love u though without u theres no direction/ The situation needs attention like in the elections/ I need you to be whole , right now I am a fraction/ You're playin with my feelings like a game in playstation.

I'd really appreciate any comments , any suggestions on how to improve , where to improve

[Gastino the Prophet]

yo it's Gastino;i can spit in english,swahili,venacular or even latino;
see am straght away from kenya; and on all yo mcs i increase great pressure;
and all your chics i give more pleasure;than yo motherfucking niggars;
its like i sold a mill copies of my first mixtapes see am making new figures;
yes earn from my mixtapes;while you still learning from your mistakes;
never joke with ma system; coz wack mcs i fix them;
nigga am never sentimental;and so my impact on yall is detrimental;wadup!

[R@PDOC]

AIYO IM THA 1ST RAP DUDE 2 SPIT THA GAME RAW
I BEEN THUGGIN MA LYF LYK PAC N OUTLAWZ
I SPIT LIQUOR RYMZ DAT GETCHU DUMB DAWG
FLO SO NASTY LYK ROTTEN PAW=-PAW
DIS 8 DOPE BARZ GON GETCHU CAUT UP
IT DONT TAKE MUCH FO ME TO MASH OUT
ONE BLADE,D-O-C GON HAVE U SIGNIN OUT
TELL YA PUNK ASS LABEL N BAND ITS TYM OUT,FUKA

[FoOtNiNjA]

Ill neva undastand why good people must die / when I say good people ,I aint talkin bout mike(jackson)/ cousin n my friend shit it wasnt their time/ cats hate this type of rap , but ima say wats on my mind/ i keep it laid back they say nigga wasup/ immortal on this shit ,some say hey keep it up/ i know i aint da best , but im tryin my best/ to keep up wit da rest , am i passing da test?/ so i aint into weezy , im more kanye west

[mceeQ]

fuck reading ur verses u guys ain't penetrate with verbals
plus u don't vote on topics so why feed u like gerbils
get a ego bigger than myself u'd have to be an obese Urkel
trying to get Laura but ya d*ck games don't get in circles/
prior to popular demand my lines leave yall jus like turtles
on their backs like u B8thes after da Q has had run thru
so chill on getting comments coz truth u couldn't spit to
any of which lines i jus thrown at and all of all you/

[FoOtNiNjA]

Thats the thing Q , i aint a battle rhymer . Thats why i said some dont understand the way i rhyme.

[41Trippa]

Hey "Q" .. you are so damn raw!!! I gotta lay tha propers down ... you never fail to raise the bar!!

[FoOtNiNjA]

Im a nolstagic kinda rapper shit not a battle rapper/ trippa your groupie ,your fan he suck u off like sweet wrappers/ u say i dnt penetrate , lemme guess ,trippa does dat/ nigga do da math , between da 2 of u , who bends his back?/ u work at railway lines , dats da only time u ever fix tracks/ i eat rappers for dinner bt ima make u my snack/ i spit fire let it burn like capetonian shacks/ make u go and hide yourself like immigrant camps/ you target me , im just a newbie , why dnt you target da champs/ are you a pussy or a broad or maybe plain simple WACK/ if i use em punchlines,they hit hard , nose bloody, like niggas on crack/ nolstagic type of rapper , footninja , make no mistake/ he not a battle rhymer so dont RETALI-ATE

[iam]

prolly these are multis account
why is it only a newbie who cyphi here

[FoOtNiNjA]

Iam , I respect all the "veterans" of this site ,and i aint neva wud do such a pussy thing like create multiple accounts. The other dudes I dont know where they came from, i was just writin my shit so MAYBE someone can tell me how far i need to go to actually write good raps. PROPS HOMES

[iam]

FoOtNiNjA said:

Iam , I respect all the "veterans" of this site ,and i aint neva wud do such a pussy thing like create multiple accounts. The other dudes I dont know where they came from, i was just writin my shit so MAYBE someone can tell me how far i need to go to actually write good raps. PROPS HOMES

oooh
i see where all this started from.ah! from here right
no prob i gat wat u said

[eljodi]

no disses, to them higher rankies, but why them kings got to push the little guys around, yall like big bros to us , we're one big african family, couzifer did dsame on my alphabetic rhyme, footninja posted sumtin there, we just need a tap on d shoulder, not criticizing our ish every time, even wen we just wana hav fun,

[iam]

c'mon dawg dont take it like that.its was a joke
keep doin ya thangs no matter wat

[eljodi]

@iam, thanks bruf, i get d jerk, sory i kinda over reacted, come to think of it i may do dsame to sum low rankies may be in years to cum, well we still being familiar, no hardies.

[iam]

eljodi said:

@iam, thanks bruf, i get d jerk, sory i kinda over reacted, come to think of it i may do dsame to sum low rankies may be in years to cum, well we still being familiar, no hardies.

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