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[cornelius]

9 lines, for your nine lives. we should post by nine thirty tomorrow.no topic just a killing, but if you on line shit, lets do it now, unless you need to go home and write.

[iam]

cornelius said:

9 lines, for your nine lives. we should post by nine thirty tomorrow.no topic just a killing, but if you on line shit, lets do it now, unless you need to go home and write.

check

[iam]

cornelius check it
u misunderstood a statement and start chasin me wit hate
hope u dont get mad when u slice like steak

Instantly Amputating Mcees That I.A.M
U Can Only Be Me Cuz u Are Wack Like Will.I.A.M
U Think Youse The Shit But You Stink Ya Mic
Iam Flow Hotter Than Volcano
Twist This Corn Body Like a Tornado
N Youse a Dick-Licker Ya Skills Stay Way Behind Mine Like Weak-Racers
Fuck Ya Hood u Should Relocate In Ma Drawers(pants)
STFU Wit Ya Infantile Streets Talk i Dont ve Nine-Lives(bitch)
cornelius wrote:

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9 lines, for your nine lives. we should post by nine thirty tomorrow.no topic just a killing, but if you on line shit, lets do it now, unless you need to go home and write.

Even a Bunch Of Flowers Can Kill Dis Bitch i Dont Need Nine-Lines

[cornelius]

listen man, this is a battle, am goin to be hard, but it nothin personal we still blood. check it



i decapitate your head with the rhymes i spit, and take your so called hot style into permanent hibernation.quit runnin your mouth like athlets/ and start sayin your hail marries like catholics/i gave birth to rap,so i can easily tell you aint my child, fuck around and am go marry your mums and have you callin me dad/listen iam! am iller than any verse you can ever concieve/more deadly than any desease you can ever percieve/ you're a lightweight, i spit bars so heavy they can build your biceps, fuck what you about you're whole style's a fraud,am the auditor of rap so i certify your rhymes as crap/ in my hood fags like you, get raped with broomsticks, how you go battle i-raq when i-raq spit rhymes so hot he does'nt script rhymes on paper cause when he does, he turns paper to vapour/ instead he uses magnetic fields and lightnin/ to script rhymes through air like planet alining/ rhymes of perfect tymin/ and as the king of hiphop, i barnish your ass from rap motherfucker. word

[iam]

Jeeez its this nine lines or one paragraph
ok lets vote

[cornelius]

yeah, how do we set it up for votes? when its time for battle we ride as enermies but after the battle, its better we keep our relationship mutual cause i skim this site is for the better of all of us.let them peeps vote.

[iam]

anybody can vote
first to three votes wins

[SKEPTIKSTYLEZ]

i'm going to be straight with u both. u need serious lessons. i'm really disappointed in u, iam. Go thru yuor verse.U've got mismatched rhymes,but u've been here for ages. Cornelius on the other hand has got potential but what the hell was that. u know how battles are done. drop a set up line,press enter and drop a delivery line. and make sure to rhyme them both. u had no rhyme scheme whatsoever. ok here is a bar by bar break. maybe ya'll catch my drift

IAM's
Instantly Amputating Mcees That I.A.M
U Can Only Be Me Cuz u Are Wack Like Will.I.A.M
^^ this was ehh. nothing there. but u've got 1.5/5...1 for rhyme n 0.5 for the punch and simile

U Think Youse The Shit But You Stink Ya Mic
Iam Flow Hotter Than Volcano
Twist This Corn Body Like a Tornado
^^again not hitting. but good self hype. that is usually ok for the set-up line but try to diss ur opponent on the delivery line. good multi rhyme. u get a 2/5

N Youse a d*ck-Licker Ya Skills Stay Way Behind Mine Like Weak-Racers
f*ck Ya Hood u Should Relocate In Ma Drawers(pants)
^^this is ur best punch so far. but mismatched rhymes here. u get a 3/5 here


STFU Wit Ya Infantile Streets Talk i Dont ve Nine-Lives(b***h)
Even a Bunch Of Flowers Can Kill Dis b***h i Dont Need Nine-Lines
^^this was ok,nothing much.ok rhymes.u get a 2.5/5 here
U score 1.5+2+3+2.5= 9 on 20. and that's cos i was judging very liberally. u can easily get a 5 on 20 for a drop like that



CORNELIUS'
^^lol. what the fuck again!!!!
I'll pretend set-up and arrangement has got nothing here so your ass doesn't fail woefully. lemme break it

i decapitate your head with the rhymes i spit, and take your so called hot style into permanent hibernation.quit runnin your mouth like athlets/
and start sayin your hail marries like catholics/
^^*yawn*. your delivery line should've been the setup not the other way round. all the concepts are played(catholic and athletes are so played). but i tried to make something off of it. i'll rate it a 2/5

i gave birth to rap,so i can easily tell you aint my child, f*ck around and am go marry your mums and have you callin me dad/
listen iam! am iller than any verse you can ever concieve/more deadly than any desease you can ever percieve/
^^again u need to interchange your lines.the second one is just self hype. always preferable as the first instead. And u didnt birth rap, so uit the falsehood. mistmatched rhymes.u get a 2.5/5


you're a lightweight, i spit bars so heavy they can build your biceps, f*ck what you about you're whole style's a fraud,am the auditor of rap so i certify your rhymes as crap/
in my hood fags like you, get raped with broomsticks, how you go battle i-raq when i-raq spit rhymes so hot he does'nt script rhymes on paper cause when he does, he turns paper to vapour/
^^Very long bars with zero rhyme scheme and self hype again without nothing at the opponent.this is getting annoying. its not an open mic contest,Corn,its a battle. get at your opponent and stop saying what u are and not...this gets a 1/5

instead he uses magnetic fields and lightnin/ to script rhymes through air like planet alining/ rhymes of perfect tymin/ and as the king of hiphop, i barnish your ass from rap motherfucker
^^On top of all that u went over the bar limit. and u didnt even have nothing there to say about your opponent. that really irritates to reader,no jokes...u get a 1 here and lose again for going over the count,so its a 0/5
Overall 2+2.5+1+0=5.5/20

You two need to take time out and study some real battle verses before going at this again. final vote goes to iam,but thats only because there's meant to be a winner

[iam]

thanks fo the break down and advice SS
i can use sum of ya points
0-1
uppin

[iam]

uppin guys

[cornelius]

true dat ,i skim the next battle will be tight.one

[R.I.S]

tbh, this was a pretty weak battle but imo IAM got this 2...same reasons as SkeptikStylez.

[iam]

R.I.S said:

tbh, this was a pretty weak battle but imo IAM got this 2...same reasons as SkeptikStylez.

thanks R.I.S
i'll try to make it harder next time
0-2
still uppin
lets finish this

[cornelius]

aight i say we do round two, and remove this much talked about weakness. what you say iam? and thanks Riss

[iam]

cornelius said:

aight i say we do round two, and remove this much talked about weakness. what you say iam? and thanks Riss

kinda busy now
wn im ready i will set it up