Unspoken Pain

I sat down and started to think

That was my first mistake

Because all the turmoil from my life

And of course everyone else's

Jus comes crashng in

I want to cry

Cry because I can't deal with my own problems

I'm to busy dealing with everyone else's

I call my sister

I want to tell her how I'm feeling

But instead I get an earful

Devestation

That's how my life feels most times

Who's there for me?

Who can I talk to when I start to feel that pain in my chest that just won't go away?

When I can't figure out a solution to my problems

Why must everyone come to me??

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    edited September 2010
    Damn!...now this is a stressed piece!...I feel the pain in it, the emotions n' all that...n' that's the beauty of poetry. It feels like you wrote this in a spar of a moment...at the correct timing, that's why it came out jus' fine!
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    edited September 2010
    yeah its touchin a bit sad.sm times thoughts get to heavy but keep writtin it actually helps lessen the weight on yo brain n keep yo head up.
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    edited September 2010
    this is another one describing how sometimes sadness find us no matter how we try being happy

    guess it's all about this life vicissitudes....u brought the picture out clearly and big-up 4 that

    unheard voice!!!
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    edited October 2010
    I like the title... and the poem does nail it.
    I sat down and started to think

    That was my first mistake
    I can relate to that... sometimes we curse why we put ideas into our own heads... we shud just proceed with the flow

    Nice piece bro
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    edited October 2010
    I sat down and started to think

    That was my first mistake

    Because all the turmoil from my life

    And of course everyone else's

    Jus comes crashng in

    [/quote]
    I want to cry

    Cry because I can't deal with my own problems

    I'm to busy dealing with everyone else's[/quote]
    I call my sister

    I want to tell her how I'm feeling

    But instead I get an earful

    Devestation

    That's how my life feels most times

    Who's there for me?

    Who can I talk to when I start to feel that pain in my chest that just won't go away?

    When I can't figure out a solution to my problems

    Why must everyone come to me??
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    edited October 2010
    thanks for the support everyone. I actually wroe this at a time wen it felt like everything was crashing in... my twin sister and i have sperated for the 1st time cus we go 2 different universities and i felt like i had no one to talk to about everything that was goin on in my, as well as some family that comes to me for advice, life... this was a great release... glad u guys like it!
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    edited December 2010
    good i felt tht
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    edited January 2011
    hypothetical poetry manifest.

    i believe writing when you are wedged in the thick of an emotion is.. this... poetry.

    blessed be.

    Honour

    K
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    edited January 2011
    :-) Wow. and that is why you are a poet. Poets bear the burdens of others. And they can talk to a paper and after that feel better. Consoled by our own words? hmm...?
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    edited February 2011
    that was very sad, and i hear u, especially because it reminded me of a shawty who went through something similar. this brought back all those feelings she confided in me a time ago, so i can somewhat understand and relate vicariously. what really just brought it all together was the simple question "who's there for me?" it makes me want to say keep trying and never give up, no matter what.
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    edited March 2011
    Cry because I can't deal with my own problems

    I'm to busy dealing with everyone else's
    emotions well expressed
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    edited May 2012
    Find a Shield in pain. it is a sadistic look. Very attractive piece.
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    edited June 2012
    I can definately relate to the pain in this piece. Sometimes I think writing is therapeutic. Nice one. Blessings.
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    edited July 2012
    I want to cry

    Cry because I can't deal with my own problems

    I'm to busy dealing with everyone else's
    Quite an emotional piece...don't know whether to say "nice one" or "things will come out right at the end". Either way, nca piece!
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